Centuries after the fall of Crystal Tokyo ... it is time for a new band of senshi to come together. Some of them are new faces; others are old faces, reborn yet again. But all of them are in trouble ... because the enemy that destroyed Crystal Tokyo is still out there. And it is waiting for them.
This blog is for comments on the story "Sailor Moon 4200"—progress reports, updates and general random musings.
The revisions are complete. (Took a lot longer than I expected, to be honest.) The chapter is now 42,964 words long, and that's after I removed a fairly significant scene.
It's now been sent out to the pre-readers. For better or for worse.
posted by Angus @ 10:56 pm
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3 Comments:
is that significant scene gone for good? or did it just not work for this chapter of the story? i always hate those moments when you realize something you wrote is really fantastic, but it just can't stay for whatever reason.
i can't wait for the chapter to be released! ^_^ i'm itching to know what happens and to know who sailor moon is.
The "significant scene" was a Pluto scene, her only appearance in the chapter. And it's one that would probably have been ... controversial. I know that when I first tried inserting the idea, back in chapter 11, a number of pre-readers objected strongly. It got removed then, too. The version in chapter 13 was extensively re-written, and about eight times the size, but in the end I decided that it just didn't fit.
If you're interested...the scene featured Pluto doing drugs. Terrified at her growing mental blindness, and desperate for any way to let her see just a little more of what she needs to do, she resorts to mind-altering substances in the hope that they'll help her pierce the veil one more time. It doesn't work all that well.
Yes, I've kept a copy. I've amassed quite a large file, now, of scenes or scene fragments that have been cut for one reason or another. I may post them somewhere, someday, with appropriate commentary. In the meantime ... this scene got cut, not because it was controversial -- I actually quite like the idea, and think that it's probably realistic under the circumstances -- but because ultimately I couldn't see it contributing anything useful to the story. In the end it would probably have led to Itsuko trying to detox a strung-out Pluto ... and I just didn't think that that fitted SM4200 all that well, not with some of the things I do have planned for Pluto later on.
hmmm...yeah, that could pose a problem. i do like the idea, very much so, but the risk of detoxing a strung-out pluto (like you said) is perhaps enough not to use it. your story is full of a lot of drama already, and the senshi have enough on their plate as it is. a little more is never *bad*, per se, and that could make an interesting "episode" but because your story isn't laid out in the typical sailor moon show "baddie-of-the-day" style, it probably wouldn't work even in that respect.
if you posted a "deleted scenes" sort of section with commentary, that would actually be very interesting and insightful. i love seeing the process you go through to make something, even for the ideas that didn't work out. i would put my vote in for that!
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