Revisions Time Again

I've made a number of small tweaks to earlier chapters, over the last few months. All of these are to make the story more internally consistent, since I've strayed a bit now and then. The changes include:

• Sese and Sven: Sven was addressing Sese as “Toyotomi-sama” in one chapter, and “Sese” in another. I've regularised this; he now calls her “Boss” throughout.
• Marisa: I’ve revised her dialogue a bit, to make her “accent” a bit more consistent. This includes one instance that might look like a typo, but isn't: in chapter 12, she now tells Ochiyo, “You have an estrong heart”. This is a nod to actual Brazilian Portuguese pronunciation.
• Dhiti and Sailor Pluto: In chapter 7, Dhiti referred to “Meiou-sama” a couple of times, but other references throughout the story suggest that she probably shouldn’t have known that name. (After all, the Church of Serenity don’t know it.) So Dhiti now simply refers to “Sailor Pluto”.
• Minor tweaks to punctuation throughout the story. In particular, where there are two quote marks together—e.g. “‘ or ’”—I've added a thin space between them to make them a bit more readable.

None of this is vital stuff, but it makes me feel a bit better when I look back at older chapters.

Meanwhile, work on chapter 17 continues!

Progress update: 9,868 words.